Commenting on fic

[cdybedahl]

In the past day or so, I've seen several people offer to comment on stories they've written. This sounds like a pretty interesting thing to do. So, people, please help me avoid doing real work by choosing something that I've written and asking me to comment on it.

Comments

[altariel.livejournal.com]

Remembering is one of my favourite stories. The end makes my throat tighten every time I read it. Do I have to ask you something specific, or will you just comment?

[cdybedahl.livejournal.com]

That depends on if there's something specific you're wondering. If not, I can just talk about it some.

[altariel.livejournal.com]

Talk about it.

[seaya.livejournal.com]

Two Girls, One Cave ^_^

[(Anonymous)]

All the Annals of the Librarian Attack Force.

[themerovingian.livejournal.com]

"Sleep." It's such a beautifully evocative story, I'd be keen to know how you came up with the plot and the narrative structure.