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Aug. 25th, 2006
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Aug. 25th, 2006 11:42 pmFor a year now, I've been trying to write a sequel to Amazon Nation. Without much success, unfortunately. Sure, I got some 7000 words written, but the story never felt right. It wasn't about the right thing. There various conflicts didn't mesh. So it's been kind of languishing for over a year.
Until yesterday. While working out, an entire new story just appeared in my mind. So I came home, threw out the 7000 words or so there was and started writing new ones. I've been working a lot this week, so there isn't much of the story yet. But at least I think the new first scene is a much better hook than the old one. And out of curiousity, I decided to post them both and let you people say which one you prefer.
This is the old, thrown-out one:
And this is the new one:
Until yesterday. While working out, an entire new story just appeared in my mind. So I came home, threw out the 7000 words or so there was and started writing new ones. I've been working a lot this week, so there isn't much of the story yet. But at least I think the new first scene is a much better hook than the old one. And out of curiousity, I decided to post them both and let you people say which one you prefer.
This is the old, thrown-out one:
( Old version... )
And this is the new one:
( New one... )